Friday, June 8, 2012

Lise & Nat: The Sun & the Night - a flash fiction story for the Forbidden Love Blog Hop

This is written for the Forbidden Love Blog Hop. This flash fiction challenge is stated as:

The phrase 'star-crossed lovers' was coined in the prologue of Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet:

"From forth the fatal loins of these two foes,
A pair of star-cross'd lovers take their life"


We're leaving the term open to interpretation.
You can put your own spin on a classic story
Create a modern retelling
Craft your very own modern star-crossed lovers.
Plus, you can close your story with any ending you like. Give your lovers a set of matching tombstones or a running chance at Happily Ever After. Their fate is in your hands!

It has to be 300 words or less.



Dancing faery in color 21st Aug 2011

Lyse & Nat:
A Story of a Forbidden Love Between a Fairy of the Sun & a Creature of the Night


300 words
Lise was a child of the Sun.  Its warmth and radiance favored her species of fairy, and she reveled in its light. One day, she was so engrossed in dancing and playing that the night fell upon her before she even realized it was getting late. Startled by the darkness creeping up and weakened from the lack of the Sun’s rays, she turned for home but found her way blocked.
A tall figure stood before her. His skin was pale and his eyes were dark. He wore all black, shrouding himself in a cloak of shadows. He smiled at her and she stared at the fangs peeking out from his smile.
She knew about vampires. Just as her fae kind could enchant and ensnare humans, these blood-drinking dark counterparts could also capture human minds through enchantment. Lise tried to move past the vampire, but tripped on a stone and stumbled.
His strong arms caught her, keeping her from falling. She lifted her gaze to his. Instantly, they were both ensnared in each other’s enchanted gazes. They kissed and sat speaking for hours. Lise learned that the vampire’s name was Nat. Nat learned that Lise loved to dance. They soon fell in love.
Before long, the Sun began to rise and Lise realized that her  beloved Nat was suffering. He could not live in her sun-filled world and she, a creature of the Sun, could not live in his eternal night. She cried out to her beloved Sun to help her but the Sun refused.
The spirit of the Forest heard her pleas and took pity on her. The Forest transformed Lise and Nat into oak trees, with their roots and branches forever entwined.  They would be together forever as trees, nourished by the sunlight yet never harmed by the night.

9 comments:

Jo Michaels said...

What a lovely story and an interesting spin on a classic tale. I love to see the way other writer's minds work. Makes me feel like less of a freak :) WRITE ON!

Meg McNulty said...

This feels rooted in mythology, which I love. Great take on the theme.

moonduster said...

Thanks so much, Jo!

moonduster said...

Meg - That's what I was trying for! Thanks so much!

Lillie McFerrin said...

Such a mystical story. It felt beautifully aged, like a treasured story passed from generation to generation. Nice job :)

moonduster said...

Thank you so much, Lillie! I love the way you described it.

lizzie loodles said...

I wondered how these two would survive their love as I read, what with her being the lover of sun and he a creature of the night which is why I loved your story. It started me thinking and asking questions and wanting to get to the end but worrying it would not be a happy ending. . you really caught me, surprised me and actually made me give a little *yay* at the end. xxx

moonduster said...

Lizzie - Thanks so much! It feels good to know you ejoyed reading it. :)

Janelle said...

Love a happy ending :) And I'm so glad a vampire has made it in to the hop! With this piece I enjoyed the fact that not only was their love forbidden, but would be physically impossible for them to maintain. Good work!